Any comments to make on this poem?

Train journey

Punched, num
bered and stoo
d up straight w
e filed into the b
lue metal tube dug
halfway into the city
like a tick, all blood runs
given the chance, I thought,
sick of getting pumped around,
like me, nauseated with the light,
all cold and wet with sweat, dyed
black in the spewed smoke factory morning.

Skaters hi-jack the bike racks opposite, despondent,
the Universe of movement and shape suspended,
dependent on the will of nature,
somehow I enjoy it.

Picking up speed through the housing estates,
wet faces smeared like paint across the glass.

The beat of the track clacking hard and hammering
past bricked up chimneys and wooden windows,
past flower gardens, coal yards, brick yards and docklands,
from steel-melting furnaces to cool green shades, browns,
and Summer yellows, heather thrown across the hills
and a tearful blue-grey sky, open on every side, welcoming.

Young laughter
echoing
in the tunnels,
echoing thoughts
and childish dreams of the moon
and my heart beating faster all the time,
out of tune.

Clever! Were you bike-riding or skateboarding?

very interesting!! i like it!! =]

Tags

Bike Tours Trail Map Bike Pedals Bike Lock Bike Lights Bike Helmet Quad Bike Pocket Bike Mini Bike

Related information

Any thoughts on this poem?

It really rolls over you, like a train. Excellent. Lines of note, at least to me: The whole image in the Skaters verse (lovely, spans the mundane--the skaters "attitude--"to the in...

How long should i keep my motorcycle running after i jump start it?

run it for 20 minuets, that should give it a good charge unless the battery is dead

...

Does anyone know Hondas future plans for the CBR600F?

I've just bought a CBR600F as my first bike - being delivered Monday! During my search i spoke to a number of dealers one of which said the 600F has been discontinued so won't be in the ...

Is it bad to work out if you are a little sick?

Don't do too much and stop if you feel worse during the exercise. The biking may bring on a coughing fit, so be careful with that. Just take it easy and be sensible. Hope you feel better soon....

Can I put a blinking light on me facing backwards or for that matter on my bike, similar to bycyclists?

Was a time I could legally use flashing red lights. I am no longer with any Fire Dept. so it's not legal for me anymore. OK, I have my reasons for disliking flashing lights, but I do have ...

I can't get my headlight to work on my bike?

You need to check from the harness back.. In other words are you getting power to the harness? If not trace it back towards the battery until you find power. Once you find power, it shouldn't ...

Wich bike is better kink gap or eastern shovelhead?

i dont know much about the kink but i know the shovelhead is pretty good for its price and will be a strong bike, but just remember it wont be the best bike out there.

...

What is the best bike frame material and how much?

The argument goes on, and on, and on. I am beginning to think there is no "best" frame material -- just different materials with different characteristics. If you are not racing, th...