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Are the gas prices making you want to exchange your car for a bicycle? Why are gas prices so high? One reason gas prices are so high is, because of conflicts going on in the world. One of the conflicts in the world is located in Nigeria, that have cut exports to the United States. The United States depends so much on oil that when oil prices go up it sparks interest on conserving oil. Since oil is an important part of modern life ,I chose to research oil for my summer assignment. There is a war going on over seas. I am not talking about the one that we are always hearing about in the news, Lebanon and Iraq. I am talking about the conflicts going on in the Nigerian Delta over oil. This little known part of the world is our nations fifth largest supplier. If Americans don鈥檛 want to ride bicycles for next century they should keep a closer eye on Nigeria. This conflict has been caused by the Ijaws and other tribes fighting 鈥渨ith each other and the federal government.鈥?(鈥淒ouble鈥︹€? I chose this as my project because this conflict has not been in the news often like other conflicts such as the conflict with Columbia, Iraq, Israel, Lebanon, and North Korea. This conflict doesn鈥檛 seem to bring the media鈥檚 attention, but I think the United States should keep a closer eye on Nigeria. I wanted to learn more on this conflict since oil is an important resource in America and through my research felt angered at the Nigerian government for their actions toward the people of Nigeria. Oil producing countries generate a large portion of their of their revenue from sale of oil. One such country is Nigeria; however the people suffer greatly because the country lives in poverty while the government becomes wealthier. The Ojaws have felt that some of the money produced by oil belongs to Nigeria. Nigerians will not allow the government to steal money that belongs to the people. Nigeria is in danger of being corrupt. When oil is discovered in a country that is 鈥減oor, (and) fighting over scraps,鈥?(鈥淒ouble鈥︹€? we would think it would be the end of poverty, but not so with Nigeria. Nigeria 鈥減ulls in $14 billion a year in oil revenue.鈥?鈥淒ouble鈥︹€? I blame the Nigerian government for not putting an end to poverty. Nigeria鈥檚 new wealth has been taken by 鈥減oliticians, in particular by the country鈥檚 military, brought to power in the country鈥檚 late 1960s civil war,鈥?(鈥淩ough鈥︹€? who have been robbing the country鈥檚 finance ever since. There is no reason that the people of Nigeria should be poor, because the oil has been found on their land and belongs to the people of Nigeria. The Ijaws used to be a 鈥渆asygoing minority tribes, earning their living with other tribes by fishing in canoes harbored in the board delta of the Nigerian River,鈥?(鈥淩ough鈥︹€? but that was forty years ago. Most of the country鈥檚 production comes from the Nigerian Delta which is now causing violent outbursts. The Ijaws are now destroying pipelines, setting fire to pipelines, protesting, selling oil they steal from pipelines and even kidnapping people. The country is in total chaos. Crime and Violence has caused a 鈥?0 percent drop in Nigeria鈥檚 oil production鈥?(鈥淩ough鈥︹€? which meant 鈥渁 shortfall of 455,000 barrels daily.鈥?(鈥淒anger鈥? They have even stepped up their attacks on foreign oil. Even Shell announced an evacuation in February of 2006 to evacuate 鈥渁n oil platform off its Atlantic coast as a precaution, shutting an additional 115,000 barrels a day.鈥?(鈥淣igeria鈥︹€? In January, 鈥渕ilitants held four men- from the United States, Britain, Bulgaria, and Honduras for 19 days before releasing them unharmed.鈥? (鈥淣igeria鈥︹€? Tribes like the Ijaws, that were once peaceful are now armed and have been fighting for years claiming to be fighting 鈥渇or better distribution of the country鈥檚 wealth.鈥?(Mouawad) I was shocked when I found out that even 鈥済roups who claim to be fighting for the interests of Niger Delta鈥檚 people鈥?(鈥淢ilitants鈥︹€? have actually 鈥渆volved into criminal gangs, adept at stealing huge amounts of oil to sell on black markets, the proceeds of which are used to buy ever more sophisticated weapons.鈥?(鈥淒anger鈥︹€? Even though the United States is not involved in the conflict, this conflict does affect the United States. Nigeria is the fifth largest supplier of oil 鈥渢o the United States, after Mexico, Venezuela, Canada, and Saudi Arabia.鈥?(Mouawad) Almost half of Nigeria鈥檚 oil is sent to the United States. Nigerian oil is prized by refiners because 鈥渋t is of a light, sweet variety that is easier and cheaper to refine that the thicker and sulfur-rich kind that comes from the Middle East and Venezuela.鈥?(Mouawad) Nigeria determines the price of oil in the United States. The United should keep a closer eye on Nigeria if they want to oil prices in America to go down. Nigeria has played an important role Africa and 鈥渋s crucial to all of West Africa, having provided the military troops and negotiating forums to quell civil war and related violence in neighboring countries.鈥?(鈥淒anger鈥︹€? Nigeria has also helped on fighting terrorism by trying to 鈥渕onitor and defuse an encroaching fundamentalism among its own Muslims.鈥?(鈥淒anger鈥︹€? Several American companies haves stakes in Nigeria such as 鈥淢obil, Chevron Texaco and Halliburton.鈥?(鈥淒ouble鈥︹€? In my opinion the United States is not doing anything to stop oil from rising. I believe the United States should be more involved with the conflict in Nigeria. I was shocked when I found out that everyone that claims to be helping Nigeria are only thinking about themselves leaving everyone in the country to defend for themselves. Oil has ruined Nigeria. The government has betrayed Nigeria from their share of oil. Even the people who took law in to their own hands to take revenge against the government have betrayed the country. The Ijaws who were once a peaceful tribe have evolved into a criminal gang. Meanwhile the rest of the world has done nothing to try and stop chaos. The rest of the world has ignored this conflict for too long, and are now paying the price at the pump. Why is Nigeria living in poverty? When Nigeria brings more than enough revenue to put an end to poverty among its citizens. Sentence 3: Comma after "is" can go away. Sentence 6: Semicolon after "modern life" should be inserted. Sentence 8: The USA is at war with Iraq and Afghanistan. Israel is at war with Lebanon. Read the papers. Note 1: Change words such as "don't" to do not. You can use "don't", but it can get on an English instructor's nerves if you do. Other than those problems, I do not see much else wrong with this essay. For future references be sure to check your spelling and grammar, that makes a big difference in your essays. Source(s): Student, English Major. to long to read the whole thing sorry you defintly got a a shawty a very big A+ YAWN yah it great and they really should tell us about that sort of stuff on the news You need to have someone good with grammar read over your essay, use fewer rhetorical questions, and spend less time talking about WHY you chose this topic and spend more time talking about the topic itself, unless your assignment specifically asks you to discuss why you chose your topic. Also say "in my opinion" and "I believe" kind of things less-- if you back up your opinions with facts, you won't need to qualify them. |
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