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H!!! Everybody... I have written something for my girl-friend. Read it and give me points out of 10. And if u want to give comments than give that also... so, i know ur response... U know how u r ??? U r like WATER in OCEAN... U r like CLOUDS in SKY... U r like DIAMOND in RING... U r like LEAVES in PLANT... U r like TYRE in BIKE... U r like PAGES in BOOK... U r like HEART in BODY... U r like LIGHT in NIGHT... U r like TEAR in EYES... U r like MOON in SKY... U r like LOVE in FIGHT... U r like FLOWER in WEDDING... U r like CRACKERS for DIWALI... U r like RAIN in MONSOON... U r like OXYGEN for LIFE... LUV u always... Says -> B A L I... Thanks for reading. Give me star if u like it... This is ur first date and this is a good poem to narrate to her. She will surely appreciate the originality of ur words. But buddy u can surely make some changes and amend it to make it even more sweet. Word usage depends on nature of ur gf. As a girl I suggest u to change the following lines :- TYRE in BIKES PAGES in BOOKS CRACKERS for LIFE OXYGEN for LIFE. Hope u don't mind this suggestion. Try something in Hindi also. U deserve a 7/10 score. When I look up to sky for finding my inspiration, I see u. When I look in deep waters to find myself, I see u. When I look at the fate in my hands, I see u. When I am upset, I feel u in the most encouraging heartbeat of mine. U r the idea of LIFE for me............... I LOVE U OR I LIKE U A LOT.............................. Try something like this along with ur original poem. Source(s): Me, of course. ***** (5 stars) cool!!! like it! 9 out of 10! good one boss........hope she will give u oxygen of her love. best luck... copy paste. See if u want to know the reality...then i will say that u get distracted somewhere.....ur gf should be the only one considered in all other things ...but wat i found is that she is considred to be a common among all others..like U r like Cloud in sky....many louds are their in sky U r like leave in plant..many leaves will be their in plant U r like CRACKERS for DIWALI...many crackers U r like PAGES in BOOK...many pages n for pages girks are like blank pages n the one who comes in her life write the love story...so this is absoulutely wrong U r like TYRE in BIKE..two tyres could be one u or the other gal n above all this shld not be consider for girl some are worthless...like U r like WATER in OCEAN... U r like TYRE in BIKE U r like FLOWER in WEDDING... Now the appropriate ones is -- U r like OXYGEN for LIFE... U r like RAIN in MONSOON U r like LOVE in FIGHT U r like MOON in SKY... U r like HEART in BODY... U r like LIGHT in NIGHT... U r like TEAR in EYES... So In my views ....if she has little knowledge of poetry then she will just say ok.... Good effort but need to upgrade I will give 5.5 out of 10 |
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