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鈥淐hildren should always wear a helmet while riding their bikes.鈥?That common saying may contain the truth 鈥?about safety first with everything we do. Safety should never be taken unconscientiously. Teaching children important lessons whereas they are young is a safe investment. It should be required to wear bicycle helmets. The number one cause of death is head injury. The cost to insurance and the society to treatment of head injury is very high. Not to reveal long term care for enduring brain damage.

(how should i begin the second paragrapgh)

my guess is that this is a speech so i will not bother with punctuation.

鈥淐hildren should always wear a helmet while riding their bikes.鈥?That common saying may contain the truth 鈥?about safety first with everything we do. (everything we do?? )

鈥淐hildren should always wear a helmet while riding their bikes.鈥?That common saying may point to the truth 鈥?safety should be the first concern in everything we do.

Safety should never be taken unconscientiously. Teaching children important lessons whereas they are young, is a safe investment. It should be required to wear bicycle helmets. The number one cause of death is head injury. (for children, bike riders, or all people?)

The cost to insurance and society to the treatment of head injury is very high.

Not to reveal long term care for enduring brain damage. (i didn't get this sentence)

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By requiring children to wear a helmet, we are providing a foundation for them to understand that safety concerns is important, and not always optional. Just as wearing a seat belt in a car is mandatory, such it should be for helmet wearing on bikes.
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The danger to the child is not the only concern. A driver who accidently hits a child is liable for injuries. This means that their insurance will have to pay for the medical bills, etc. An automobile insurance policy has a limit to which it will pay, which some state's requiring as little as $25,000. Helmets help to keep medical bills under this limit so the driver does not have to lose their home or other assets, and often is the case, when the individual cannot afford to pay anything more then the insurance provides.
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Mandatory helmet requirements also promp organizations to try to help those who could not afford helmets, get them. Because the helmet is required, there are more groups there to ensure every bike rider has one. If it was not required, would police stations, fire stations, and fraternal societies like Kiwakis clubs offer programs to ensure all kids got a helmet?
鈥淐hildren should always wear a helmet while riding their bikes.鈥?That common saying may contain the truth about safety first, with everything we do. Safety should never be taken unconscientiously. Teaching children important lessons when they are young is a safe investment. It should be obligatory to wear bicycle helmets, seeing that the number one cause of death is head injury. The cost to insurance and the society to treatment of head injuries are very high. Not to mention the long term care for enduring brain damage.

Choosing not to wear a helmet while riding a bicycle is a very costly and dangerous risk one might be taking鈥?
Me!!
Children should always wear a helmet while riding their bikes.鈥?That common saying may contain the truth 鈥?about safety first with everything we do. Safety should never be taken lightly. Teaching children important lessons when they are young is a safe investment. It should be required to wear bicycle helmets. The number one cause of death is head injury. The cost to insurance and the society for treatment of head injuries is very high, not to mention long term care for enduring brain damage.
I'd work on the first paragraph first. as it is cheaper than a sleep-aid and contains a spelling error or two. Try this:
WHAM! Too late the screech of brakes, too late the apologies for yet another unecessary death of a child which could have been prevented by a safety helmet.
Surviving former motorcyclist and successfull author/Indy winner Maria Andratti (2020) credits her recent automotive triumph to always wearing a "crash helmet" and other safety
gear during and after her progressive triumphs from BMX, MX and on to NASCAR racing. Always the professional, Ms. Andratti stresses the importance of the survivalist's approach to competitve sports by stating, "Be aware and be around for the next race."

Your original premise about safety is correct, but you are far too "preachy." People are going to resent that, but they will permit you to take them on an imaginative trip to the future via the creation of "Maria" Andratti, a female NASCAR driver or another oval track heroine of your creation. You may use" Maria" with my blessing and I hope she helps.

Okay, this old guy may have helped you with a better premise, but it is up to you to expand.
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